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[M&L bowser's castle remix]

Pretty cool

This song is pretty cool. I don't know the original song though.
What i don't really like is that the crash is hit so many times. I can't really think of any other things that could be better.
Nice job on this one!
8/10
5/5
MH16

darthmarus responds:

yeah, it's a pretty obscure castle theme, which i think is a shame because it is one of my favorites. thanks for reveiwing!

[Last Promise (Kinen Menu)]

Beautiful

Hmm, the strings and the piano compliment eachother perfectly and this entire song is in perfect balance. Nothing is too loud and nothing is too quiet. Nothing is too low and nothing is too high. Nothing could be better in this song.
In this song i can feel sadness, but also hope.
Now i'm going to listen for the 3rd time and i'll try write down some of the things that i imagine while listening to the song.
00:00-00:12
A man is sleeping in a bed. He's is slowly waking up and the image is zooming out. Now you can see that he is in a prison.
00:13-00:28
The man stands up and walks to the bars. After a short moment he walks to his bed again and he sits down.
00:29-00:38
He starts to wonder how things were, when he was still a free man. He wonders how things were, before the judges said he was guilty. If he could only prove he was innocent...
00:39-01:03
A flashback begins.
He's seeing him and his kids playing in a large open field. They had so much fun together just running around and playing games.
He wants to go back to that wonderful time and do it all over again.
01:04-01:27
The flashback fades away and he sees that the guards are coming to his cell.
It's time for the weekly visits and his wife comes almost every week and sometimes she brings the children with her.
01:28-02:10
He walks with the guards to the meeting place. He really hopes that his wife brought the children with her.
He has been 4 years in prison now. He only has 6 months until his release, but he is scared. He is scared that things can never be the same again.
02:11-03:02
When he walks through the door he sees his wife and children. They hug eachother and sit down at a table.
He asks his children how things were at school.
When they all told what they did that week they are starting to talk about how things were. They are talking about the trips they went on and the funny things that they experienced together.
03:03-03:42
The bell rings. Visiting time is over and they kiss eachother goodbye.
Slowly he walks away, with a tear falling from his eye, but also with a smile on his face.

Zero123Music responds:

that story was beautiful
truly, thank you for the 10, the story and the compliments^^

>>Zero

[[AltS] - Cet Air]

Funny :D

I can't find a better word than ''funny'' to describe this song. And that's not negative, but extremely positive :-)
Now i'm going to listen to the song again and see if i hear anything that could be better. I didn't hear anything to improve the first time i listened ^^

When the song starts you immediatly hear the quality of the song. You also hear the mood of the song and that's very good :-)
Also, the song is NOT repetitive. Actually, it's far from repetitive and you did a very good job on that.
All the synths and little sounds work together amazingly!
The song flows really well too.
When you go into the next section (at 01:00) the change is quite big, BUT it is so well timed! Changes can do a song good and this change definatly did that ^^
Then you build things on that section which really gives you the feeling that it's working towards something. And it did! :D
Then at 02:08 you bring another change to the song. This change isn't as well timed as the first one, but it is still very very nice.
Then the end comes...
The end is the only thing in this song that i didn't like. I mean, you hear a synth playing and then it... stops. It just stops. No cool ending effect or no real climax.
The best thing i think you could do here is to change the last note an octave plus a few notes higher and hold that note a little longer and fade it out. Don't fade it out too slow, but not too fast either, just do what feels right.

All in all, you're getting a 10/10. I know, i should give you a 9/10, because a 10/10 is a perfect score and i had some critique, but you deserved a 10/10. And i'm serious about that. You can just hear the work put into this song and it really pays of.
So, that was my review. I hope it was helpful to you :D

alternativesolution responds:

:D <--That is my face right now. You have no idea how happy I am :D !
I really, REALLY appreciate your reviews. This one was especially helpful and inspiring :) And I know what you mean about the end. I was iffy..but now I'm not. So, I'm off to fix that >X-]
By morning it should sound better. Thanks so much for reviewing :D

[Late [HH]]

Nice percussion!

But it's lacking... catchyness i think :P
When you make a short song it really has to be catchy :P
Anyway, you did a good job, but it's not your best.
9/10
5/5
MH16

Helth responds:

thanks man, just a little goodie =]

Helth

[Energy Dance]

Nice ^^

You're really good at making dance and this song proves it :-)
Great job and keep it up!
10/10
5/5
MH16

syphonmax responds:

Thanks man

[70X1C]

Cool and... toxic!

What's wrong with FeZaphobiK and Ciuka?
They just don't understand what it's like to me a song like this. And did he say the drums were bad?! I don't believe it!!! The drums are INSANE! Lol, sorry, but i just had to write that in caps :P
Anyway, back to the song.
Well, i think the score says enough. It has a score of 4.49 and that is pretty amazing :-)
Great job on this song Will!

MH16

Marks-a-lot responds:

Will!? this is Brad Pit, haven't you seen my movie Mr and Mrs Smith?

[(DJ-T) Sleeping]

Yay, top 5! :D

And this track totally deserves it!
Really nice work man, i can't think of anything to improve.
5/5
10/10

zenodio responds:

Thanks a lot! :D

Really, i'm so happy about it!

[YRX~vs~MH16~eXogenisiZ]

Hey!

Hey! :D
You did a really good job on building my simple melody into such an awesome song!
I couldn't have done it myself :P
Oh and btw, can you write my name with capital letters? XD
Anyway, 5/5 and 10/10! :D

MH16

YouriX responds:

I am glad you liked it! I guess my hard work paid off :)
And i fixed the name!
And thanks for the comment also!

[Gungaripian]

Well...

I actually have no ideas how to expand it further, but if you're really stuck there are 2 things you could do.
1. Leave this song for what it is and make a couple of other songs first. Then return back to this song and see if you can expand it. If not, repeat the process :P
2. Make this a loop. It sounds great and loops are very cool sometimes too! :D

Well, i hope i helped you a bit. And if i didn't help you then let me take away your dissapointment with a:
10/10
5/5
MH16

Marks-a-lot responds:

Well this song was made because I was stuck on my song "toxic" now I am stuck on this one...lol, thanks for the review though. I am sure I will figure something out soon enough.

[[AltS]- Dry Ice]

Hmmm...

I think this is a pretty hard song to review review :P
There's so much going on and i can't really seperate all the melodies and bass lines. Well, i'm going to try anyway :-)

The 8-bit intro was pretty good. I don't really like 8-bit stuff, but that's just my personal taste. That low bell thing that is playing with it is pretty nice too.
Then the song suddenly explodes. I think a slower buildup fits better here, the low bass and the loudness of the song are a bit overwhelming.
I don't really know how to explain this, but i think that when a listener listens to a song he wants to hear what he expects to hear. Of course surprises can do a song good, but this change was just too much at a time.
Hey, now i know how to say it: the listener has to get used to a song. If you change the song so dramatically so early, the user didn't have much time to get used to the song.

I think that synth that is playing a little melody and comes in at 00:13 should have a higher volume. Not too much volume though, that would throw a listener of his seat :P
Hmmm, it could also be that that bass synth is just too loud...

Then those bells come in and the rest of the song just repeats itself.
At 00:40 the song calms down a bit, but the bass is way too loud at that point. The bass was a bit loud before, but in this part it's WAY too loud.
There's a really strange stutter of the song at 00:46, i don't know what that is :P

At 00:53 the song calms down more and that part is REALLY nice. REALLY nice!
I think that the best part of the song is from 00:53, to the ending. It's just so smooth and easy to listen too.
I love those smooth bells, but the bass is still a bit distorded though. I think a smoother bass would've fit more in this part of the song.
At the end you throw a little reversed part and this time (not like your other song) it's time perfectly and it's just a very good outro.

Conclusion:
This song has potential, but there are too many things holding the song back. An example of that is the bass, which is also the biggest problem. I think you tried to make the bass sound very powerful, but it's too distorded and loud.

Overall i give you an 8,5 out of 10. It's a pity you can't work on this track anymore, because you didn't save it :P

Oh, and don't think that i think that this was a bad song because of this review. I just tried to point out what could've been better ;-)

Keep making those songs! :D

8,5/10
5/5 (i wanted to give you a 4/5, but i didn't because of the low rating :P)

MH16

alternativesolution responds:

Whoa! What a freaking awesome review, man! :D Thanks!!
That's a lot for me to improve on ---yes I know stupid project file>:( And electronic isn't quite my thing..I do relatively few of that kind of stuff, well..except Chippish..that was actually half decent. But yeah =D
This was very, very helpful. But you better start making me crappy reviews..or else I'll be calling you down to review every freaking..err..couple months when I post a song... >:D
[by the way, my speakers have frequency knobs (I don't know if others do?)...and what do you know? My treble knob > bass knob. yeah. >.< so thanks for telling me it was real bassy! now I know xD ]